Friday Fictioneers – Memories are made of this

Tis Friday and once again Ms Rochelle has set us a challenge of coming up with a 100 word story to fit the picture below. The image is courtesy of Rich Voza (nice one Rich), you’ll remember him from his Thursday Throng author interview last month. It’s his copyright so play fair and if you’d like to know more about how to get involved, well just haul yourself over to Ms Rochelle’s website and join in the fun.

Flight

Stepping out, she felt the warmth. It was late but the heat hadn’t yet dissipated and she gasped at its intensity.

Turning, she grasped Charlie’s hand. “Let’s go and find daddy shall we”.

Charlie looked up, trusting she knew what to do.

Passports flashed, cases retrieved and all too soon they were in the arrivals hall.

“Daddy, daddy”. Charlie shot off towards a tall, dark haired man who bent low to pick him up and swing him round.

“How ya doin buddy?” He turned to her, “Thank you for escorting him Ms Jones”.

She turned away, her job was done.

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Linda Parkinson-Hardman

Transformational counsellor, coach and women's health advocate. Professionally I'm an information scientist who specialises in change management, culture change and adoption of digital technologies in large enterprises and organisations. I am a writer and author of nine books to date, and I've edited a further seven; phew what a lot for a Thursday afternoon :-)

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36 Responses

  1. Thank Bjorn πŸ™‚

  2. You have a lovely Ms Jones I believe πŸ™‚

  3. writeondude says:

    Nice little piece. We all need a Ms Jones to help us find out way. Well, we blokes do anyway.

  4. Excellent little tale, cleverly unfolded.

  5. A soft twist that changed the whole perspective of the story, and wish to know the untold parts.

  6. rich says:

    glad to help, and i know what you mean.

  7. I know what you mean. I tend to either have too many, with overly long sentence structures, or too few and run all the words together. I shall modify my little story though πŸ™‚

  8. rich says:

    more mistakes are made with commas than anything else. read a short story in “the new yorker” yesterday with some really poor comma use. drives me crazy that such a magazine can’t get that right.

  9. Thanks Mr Rich – I did intend to take it somewhere else but it sorted of gravitated towards it’s end instead. Perhaps there is potential for something longer. Thanks for the feedback, commas are never a strong point πŸ™‚

  10. rich says:

    it left me wondering if ms jones was underappreciated, as if a “thanks” just wasn’t enough. also wondering if ms jones might have thoughts about something more than just helping with the child. i felt an extra longing that perhaps he wasn’t aware of.

    also, this line: Stepping out the warmth hit her. It was late but the heat hadn’t yet dissipated and she gasped at its intensity.

    i think there are a couple of commas needed, something with a pause. like: “Stepping out(,) the warmth hit her.” however, this may also be a misplaced modifier because this states that “the warmth” is what was stepping out. really, she was stepping out. so it should be more like, “Stepping out, she felt the warmth.” or “She stepped into the warmth.”

    also, there should be a comma after “late” here: It was late(,) but the heat…

  11. I’m getting used to it happening more and more πŸ™‚

  12. Thanks Sandra πŸ™‚

  13. Why thank you very kindly Tom πŸ™‚

  14. Thanks Janet, I’m glad you enjoyed it πŸ™‚

  15. Thank you very kindly Jackie πŸ™‚

  16. Thank you very kindle Celestine πŸ™‚

  17. Ah, that’s a great compliment and I’m pleased it appealed πŸ™‚

  18. I like it too Bill πŸ™‚

  19. It certainly is weird when that happens, especially with the current weather here πŸ˜‰

  20. That was the way it started out but then it sort of changed part way through. I’ve also been given another angle for it too, which I might try again in the future πŸ™‚

  21. Thank you very much Rochelle πŸ™‚

  22. Dear Linda,
    A nice turn of events well told. I enjoyed this.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  23. NOt sure what was happening here, but it sure has major possibilities. I was expecting his wife to be with the son, but apparently not. Mrs. Jones? Great hook.

  24. Sarah Ann says:

    I enjoyed this different POV. And the first couple of sentences capture completely the first time you arrive Florida/ Bangkok etc. Warm and humid at night – weird for someone from the UK.

  25. billgncs says:

    trust… I like that.

  26. nice twist. I love it when I find something I don’t expect.

  27. Very nice. A great twist πŸ™‚

  28. JackieP says:

    Really nice read. Interesting take on the picture. πŸ™‚

  29. t says:

    I’m glad it did!

  30. I enjoyed how you led me to believe they were mother and child, but they weren’t.

    janet

  31. That happens to me all the time!

  32. Tom Poet says:

    A heart warming story. Very well done.

    Tom

  33. Sandra says:

    That was a different take on the prompt. The people who look after minors on long haul flights are often overlooked in the joys of reunification. Nice one.

  34. It was an odd one Doug; I started it intending to finish with something romantic, but half way through realised it was something else entirely!

  35. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Linda,

    This was an imaginative take on the prompt and an insight into the neccessities of travel these days. Did this bubble up from past experience or from your creative mind alone?

    Aloha,

    Doug

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