Friday Fictioneers – Too near the sun

This week’s photograph for the weekly challenge set by Madison Woods called Friday Fictioneers is a beautiful picture provided by Doug McIlroy which looks very like the top of the world to me.

Copyright Doug McIlroy

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Whhhhhhhhheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee …….!

The flight took him upwards, away from the mountains and their prison towards freedom.

He heard his father call over the wind ‘Russsy, remember what your mother said … don’t disobey your father …. just follow me’.

Pretending not to hear preferring to be be just like the crows who fly as high as they dare then tumble towards the earth in an endless game of chicken on a windy day, Rus continued his unknown, internal game of consequences.

Until his death, Dae berated himself for the lack of attention that meant he didn’t notice Rus climb too high. His mind played the scene over and over watching the dark mass tumbling toward the sea and destruction.

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The idea behind Friday Fictioneers is that you submit a 100 word flash fiction story associated with the picture challenge added the previous Wednesday. You can read the other submisions this week on Madison’s Blog here: http://madisonwoods.wordpress.com/flash-fiction/desolation/. There is also a Facebook Page too specially for Friday Fictioneers and you can find it here:Β http://www.facebook.com/FridayFictioneers. If you’d like to know the rules then this is the page to visit:Β http://madisonwoods.wordpress.com/flash-fiction/friday-fictioneers/; and finally, if you’d like to read my previous attempts you can find them all listed here: http://healthyhappywoman.co.uk/tag/friday-fictioneers/

Linda Parkinson-Hardman

Transformational counsellor, coach and women's health advocate. Professionally I'm an information scientist who specialises in change management, culture change and adoption of digital technologies in large enterprises and organisations. I am a writer and author of nine books to date, and I've edited a further seven; phew what a lot for a Thursday afternoon :-)

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46 Responses

  1. Sonia Lal says:

    well done!

  2. Linda says:

    I have that feeling about it not being quite real all the time …. mmm sounds like we have something major in common here πŸ™‚

  3. flyoverhere says:

    Nicely done!

  4. rainang says:

    Haha…I always feel like a woman on the edge of reality…and being an author is not an easy to thing to realise I reckon..its like “oh ok, now what? its not even a real job!”….

  5. Linda says:

    Wow, thanks for that it all adds to the visual imagery I have and helps to explain why the crows do what they do around our home πŸ™‚

  6. Linda says:

    I guess he’d be a bit like candle wax dipped in water – all white and hard and brittle …. I know that the title of my novel is called Woman on the Edge of Reality but it was the title of this blog for many years before that was ever conceived and I’ve always said that it’s because that’s where I feel I am most of the time, betwixt and between different realities (but I’m not odd, honestly). When I first started on this blog I was never sure what it was going to be about and it languished for about six years before I finally realised I was an author (I’d been saying that was my dream for years whilst busily producing and publishing books …. duh!) and so got my act together …. sorry for rambling on … πŸ™‚

  7. Linda says:

    Thanks Carrie πŸ™‚

  8. Linda says:

    Which one Dae or Russy? Russy should have listened to his Mum …. LOL πŸ™‚

  9. Linda says:

    Thanks Janet – and I thoroughly enjoyed your mine tale of revenge served in the air πŸ™‚

  10. Linda says:

    Why thank you kindly and I really enjoyed yours too πŸ™‚

  11. Definitely felt the mythological vibe on this one. Well done! Thank you for your kind comments on mine! http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/05/30/friday-fictioneers-1-june-2012-the-conquerer/

  12. Janet says:

    Don’t know what else I can say that hasn’t been said already. Great work. Here’s mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/06/01/payback/

  13. dbfurches says:

    Thanks for this post. Alwasys appreciate a good classical allusions.
    Mine’s here if any of your readers are interested: http://stonesoupnovelist.com/2012/05/31/a-scene-something-on-the-horizon/

  14. rich says:

    aww poor guy.

  15. Carrie says:

    I instantly pictured Icarus and his tragedy. Nicely done

  16. JKBradley says:

    I do enjoy the telling of such tales and I am a fan of Icarus. Nicely conveyed, Linda.

    Here’s mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/05/30/flash-fiction-friday-an-addiction/

  17. rainang says:

    Wonder how he looked, would he have been covered in wax?? Tis is so cute..would like to get inside your head when you’re writing these stories to see how it works! πŸ™‚

  18. Gray Toast says:

    I love the reference to the crows’ dynamic flight ability. Their wings are actually designed for agile maneuvering in forests, with the wide spacing between feathers around the tips as well as the roundness of the tips. I did a self-study on aerodynamics for an art/writing project. Its amazing what you can find! Here’s mine: http://saberdragon.wordpress.com/2012/05/31/friday-flash-fiction-an-excerpt-from-saber/#comment-239

  19. Nifti says:

    Very well done, Linda. My attempt (kinda close) is here: http://niftitalks.com/2012/06/01/a-prayer/

  20. Linda says:

    Thanks Erin for the lovely comment πŸ™‚

  21. erinleary says:

    Nicely done. I saw the connection to Icarus as well – and feel you did it justice.

    Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/05/31/flash-friday-fiction-3/

  22. Linda says:

    Do you know, there are just some words which I love rolling around in my head – so I know exactly what you mean πŸ™‚

  23. Linda says:

    Thank you very much Jeffrey πŸ™‚

  24. A nicely modernized re-telling of a classical myth. Well done.

  25. The way it sounds! πŸ˜‰

  26. Linda says:

    So what is it about tumbling that you like so much? And thanks for the lovely comment too πŸ™‚

  27. Wonderful piece, Linda, and ‘tumbling’ is one of my favourite words at the moment!

    Ours is here http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/time-is-running-out (160 words)

  28. Linda says:

    Thank you so much and I shall pop right on over πŸ™‚

  29. Linda says:

    Oooh that sounds interesting, what would that story be then?

  30. Ah, a tad similar to mine, though without the greek mythology. A wonderful take on the prompt. I am over here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/fridayfictioneers-my-pilot/

  31. rochellewisoff says:

    Ah Bach! I missed the Russ/Icarus, too. Nice take on it. I almost went with a story from Hawaiian mythology but it wasn’t working for me. Here’s mine. http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/06/kiss-me-sailor.html

  32. TheOthers1 says:

    I should proofread my own comments before I leave them. I meant to say I hope that my comment doesn’t come across poorly. And I see what you’re saying about the calling to him. Do your thing! πŸ™‚

  33. Linda says:

    It’s a shame we miss so many things as we get older but I must admit that I’ve found this exercise particularly good at re-acquainting myself with many things πŸ™‚

  34. Linda says:

    I think I was trying to convey the calling to Rus from his father although I realise that might translate in my mind rather than in the readers. Thanks for the alert and feedback though very much appreciated πŸ™‚

  35. Atiya says:

    A great tale of caution. I didn’t catch the underlying mythology in it until the top comment. Then I was pleasantly reminded of just about every thing I was fascinate by as a teenager. Great share mine is over here: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/06/friday-flash-fiction-start-day.html

  36. Linda says:

    Oh thank you – what a lovely thing to share and say too and I shall as I plan to start doing more fiction on my blog in the future too πŸ™‚

  37. TheOthers1 says:

    I confess complete ignorance to some Greek mythology so I went to educate myself. Now that I am up to speed, I will say this was a great reworking of the ancient mythology. Nice job. (did you mean to put 3 esses in Russy? And the following sentence has the word be appearing twice. I that doesn’t come across poorly.)

    My linky: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/31/the-beautiful-hush/

  38. bittercharm says:

    Hi Linda,

    Your story was a lot more than a few words on a page. I really enjoyed reading it and had to read again and again, to make a picture of my own. Keep Penning.

    Regards,
    BC

  39. Linda says:

    I’m a big fan of mythology, Greek or otherwise and the flying was the thing that hit me as soon as I saw the picture – the two came together beautifully πŸ™‚

  40. Linda says:

    I’m sure they would enjoy yours as I did and thanks for the lovely comment too – muchly appreciated πŸ™‚

  41. Linda says:

    Thanks Kaitlin and I enjoyed yours too πŸ™‚

  42. Kwadwo says:

    A touch of Greek mythology to a flash fiction. Nice.

    Here’s mine: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/01/the-standpoint/

  43. Linda says:

    You got it right first time Doug πŸ™‚

  44. Kaitlin says:

    Ohhhh, the above commenter helped me get it. Great! http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/06/01/friday-fictioneers-5/

  45. This is very clever – modern, with a classical tinge. Well-written, too. I like it. Mine’s at http://marilynkaydennis.wordpress.com/2012/06/01/madison-woods-friday-fictioneers-waiting/ if your readers would like to read it.

  46. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Linda,

    Icarus—-Russy? I’m tuned in and getting it now (I think:). Very nice story. It is the top of the world.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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